When working with a partner and dealing with the creation of something as visual as a literal film scene, sometimes the best way to get ideas out is to just write. Messy, ugly, unorganized, improper... Just write.
So, Jack and I did exactly that.
Heres an improper, extremely dense, tasteless version of how Jack and I want the scene to go down:
First VERY rough draft of our opening scene:
Film opens with an establishing shot of a diner. We see a girl there (Keira’s character) on the phone. She is pacing, not nervously, more waiting for something. We hear a phone answer as she stops walking.
Keira: Hey. Ok. What song do you want me to play?
On phone voice: Such an insignificant detail. Think of the bigger picture here…
(Hangs up the phone)
The scene shifts to a long shot of the inside of a diner. We see a hand reach and select a song. The rest of the audio goes silent, and we only hear the song being played.
The shot shifts as we see a boy from the back sitting in a booth, alone (Jack’s character). There is a tracking shot moving towards the back of Jack as he looks up. The camera is moving at the speed that Keira would be walking towards him at. We see close ups and tracking shots of Keira walking as well. The camera slows and we see Keira walk and sit down across from him.
The camera is set on a close up of Keira, now staring at Jack. Shot reverse shot- Jack is confused. This happens a few times.
*The song is playing- the first break in audio we hear is-
Jack: Keira why are yo-
Keira: (seemingly sarcastic) Sh. Don't talk! Just listen.
Jack: What? I don't even know what you're-
Keira: You think I don't know? Come on Jack we both know why I asked you to talk.
Shots start here of onlookers in the restaurant, briefly.
Jack: Keira, I genuinely dont understand. Please just calm down-
Keira: You did not just tell me to calm down. 3 Years. Down the drain
Jack: What are you-
Keira: Do I not mean anything to you? Does this song not mean anything to you? What about this booth huh? Dont you remember? Anything we ever did together? Did it ever mean anything to you?
Jack: I didn't mean to it seriously was just a stupid mistak-
Keira: Save it. Some one else can here it. Everyone here knows what a damn cheater you are
**Water is splashed in Jack’s face,
Chatter and Ooos are heard, Keira storms out…
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